Wednesday, February 16, 2011

Fun Poem

Authors Note: If you guys have any ideas on a verse I could add to the ending that would be great. I ran out of time so I just stopped. 


There's no where to go,
there's no where to be.

The only things,
are me and the sea.

But then it changes,
the sky goes dark.

The wind picks up,
and the air turns stark.

I feel so small,
compared to it all.
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4 comments:

  1. UnknownMarch 1, 2011 at 10:02 AM

    I really like this. It's short and sweet, and deals with a theme from literature that's as old as the Bible! Nicely done.

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  2. UnknownMarch 1, 2011 at 10:19 AM

    Real nice. It's really cool, I like your first and second stanza together. You should add something about the boat your on like:
    The boat starts to rock, like it's going to tip
    I curl into a ball and bite hard on my lip

    The wind picks up on my worn down boat
    And all I can do is watch, stand and gloat

    No one to be seen for distances around
    And no where to set foot and hard, dry ground

    I feel like I am soon to fall
    Stuck in the middle of this all

    Then you should like re- do your first stanza. Real nice poem you have so far, good luck finishing it. :D

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  3. Ally CondonMarch 7, 2011 at 10:21 AM

    That's a good idea.

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  4. BastianMarch 30, 2011 at 10:52 AM

    That sounds really interesting, what made you think about this? And sure I'd love to make an ending verse ahaha. Just it might seem a bit sad:

    I look at the night sky
    and find I start to cry

    One thought alone echoes in my head
    And it's answer is one I dread

    "Oh my...
    ....where am I?"

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