Authors Note: This is sort of a rough draft. I'm not sure if I want to use it as my response to the movie. If you have any ideas please let me know. My 'thesis' is to keep dreaming. I hope that's understood in this poem.
Rapunzel, Rapunzel, let down your hair!
Little does she know that that's not fair.
She takes her power,
Then locks her in a tower.
But this does not stop her,
For she will still dream.
She'll dream, and dream,
'Til she bursts at the seam,
To one day be,
Sitting on a boat,
Deep in the sea,
Watching what lies before thee.
You know, when we talk in class about taking risks, this is the sort of thing that can be a real risk for a writer, and I appreciate that you did this.
ReplyDeleteWhat you wrote here is called "closed form", where a poet establishes rules to follow like the number of syllables in a line, and a rhyme scheme. They can be particularly difficult to write. If you look at my page, you'll notice that I usually write in open form, although some of mine are closed too. If you would like to continue working on this form, let me know so I can give you some pointers.
This poem is smartly written and it has a lot of voice. I enjoyed reading it and think that you should continue to write poetry.
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