Friday, December 3, 2010

Authors Note: This is a poem I wrote during workshop day. It's about being on vacation-someplace warm were I would rather be!

Waves crashing on the shore,
makes me want to swim some more.

I can see children play,
who have been here all day.

They scream and shout,
some even pout.

For the sunscreen hurts their eyes,
and soon I hear cries.

Their mom calms them down,
by acting like a clown.

Which makes them laugh,
their pain is cut in half.

Now they're ready to swim,
so they splash with their limbs.

This is so much fun
until vacation's done

2 comments:

  1. The last sentence sounds kind of weird, syllable wise. I would consider turn vacation is done to vacation's done.

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  2. Yeah, you're right it sounds better that way.

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